Itís that time again, but first I would like to thank the teams for putting up with the some of the issues that cropped up during this challenge and for continuing to write in spite of them. Just so you know, the Referees had a long talk about them and some of the rules will be amended for the next round, including a section on alternates.
Secondly, Kumydabookworm has moved on so I would like to introduce you to our new referee, red and gold. Thanks, red and gold, for joining the team - you've been a wonderful help already.
Now on to the critiques.
Gryffindor: The game itself was very well written with lots of action and movement, commentating, reaction from the fans, and interaction with refs. Your pace, flow, and technical aspects were good. However, it felt like your dialogue was a little overdone at times; you should add some more description in-between. Your plot seemed a little straightforward, so some more creativity and mystery feeling would have helped. Lastly, we caught some Americanisms so watch out for those. Overall good job with the Quidditch, you just need to work on some the other aspects.
Hufflepuff: Failed to submit an entry.
Ravenclaw: You started off following the prompt with some good creativity and a nice sense of mystery. Also the setting, action and the description of the Quidditch game itself were good. However, the constant tense-shifting made the story very hard to follow, and there were several spelling, punctuation and grammatical errors throughout. The flow was off in several places, and the story switched too quickly from the poltergeist to Romilda Vane, leaving some plot confusion for the reader. You had some nice ideas and recovered wonderfully from losing your Captain, but remember to Beta each others' work.
Slytherin: Your Match had nice characterization, creativity, pace, and humour. There was one or two instances where the flow jumped, but it wasnít a major issue. We would have liked to have seen more description of the game - it was a little too focused on the people at times. Also, we found some technical errors, and we missed the sense of mystery that the prompt asked for. Overall you had some great ideas, and nice use of creativity with the prompt.
And the winner of the November 2007 Quidditch World Cup is:
Congratulations, Gryffies! Gonz and I would like to present you with this banner, made by Ritta/mugglemathdork.
Wear it with pride!
Well done, teams! We look forward to next season!
Gonz and Andi/red and gold